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posted Mon, March 9, 2015

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9th Mar 2015, 4:57 AM

keiiii

Update 2 of 2 for today. If you missed the previous page (posted literally two seconds ago), please make sure to read it!

That wraps up Chapter 3: Loved Ones. I hope you've enjoyed the story so far! Which aspects did you enjoy, and which aspects do you think could be improved? (All of them, I know, but you know what I mean.) Anything else stand out to you in any way?

Chapter 4 will begin after a little break, on March 26th. Check out this little teaser for it!

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9th Mar 2015, 5:06 AM

rufiangel

Oh wow, that was an unexpected ending, given the mostly friendly and unassuming nature of Ethan we'd been given so far.

I think so far, I enjoy the way you're spending time to build the world without explaining it in words; you mainly use the environment to show us how different things are, especially in stark contrast to the world Ethan is from. I also like how it's all unfolding from a conversation and in Ethan's perspective, without third-party or narrator info dumps. It's much more interesting this way.

If I had to suggest any improvements? Hmm... I don't know if I can really think of any at the moment. I'll let you know if I come up with anything. XD;; Mostly I just feel like saying, 'I want moar!' which is hardly an 'improvement' you could validly make. XD;;;;

Thanks for sharing this greatness with us! Looking forward to the next chapter! <3

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view keiiii's profile

9th Mar 2015, 3:46 PM

keiiii

You know I always 200% appreciate your support, but since I can't thank you enough for it, I'll say it again here. ❤︎❤︎❤︎ I'm glad you've enjoyed the story so far!

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view TheD-Wrek's profile

9th Mar 2015, 6:45 AM

TheD-Wrek

I love that last panel... man, so damatic. Wow. :D

Improvements? I dunno, man.... I guess if you updated daily then... haha, neah. I'm JK. :3

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view keiiii's profile

9th Mar 2015, 3:47 PM

keiiii

That last panel has a bunch of cameos. I'll be posting a cameo credits thing soon! They were fun to draw ^^

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view rufiangel's profile

9th Mar 2015, 9:32 PM

rufiangel

Oh oh! I recognise Akira from Hazy Daze then! XD Just one, but... no wonder he seemed familiar! lol

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view alston123's profile

9th Mar 2015, 11:19 AM

alston123

Dang, man. I know what you mean.

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view sicemera's profile

10th Mar 2015, 2:45 PM

sicemera

nice how you made the last panel into like 2 panels. one like a dark panel itself with him saying what you dont do..and as you scroll down more seeing the aftermath of what just happened. really nice effect there

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view keiiii's profile

13th Mar 2015, 10:06 PM

keiiii

Thank you! That whole bit pretty much wrote and drew itself once I figured out some super basic writing issue that had been eluding me.

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view NeilKapit's profile

10th Mar 2015, 4:09 PM

NeilKapit

A lot of questions about that final panel flashback, particularly who Ethan was fighting and if they actually deserved the beating.

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view keiiii's profile

13th Mar 2015, 10:19 PM

keiiii

That IS a very good question. We'll be getting that answer eventually... waaay down the road when everyone probably has forgotten about this XD

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view melaredblu's profile

11th Mar 2015, 2:32 AM

melaredblu

Wow, Ethan. That's pretty dang scary, I wouldn't want to be up against you in a fight nope no thanks.
Still, he seems like a nice person. Whoever got him to that point must've gone way to far. That, or this must have been at a point in his life when he was much more volatile than he is right now, because all things considered, he's been very rational.

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view keiiii's profile

13th Mar 2015, 11:25 PM

keiiii

It could very well be both... We'll see! :o

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view Steven-Vincent's profile

26th Dec 2015, 12:01 PM

Steven-Vincent

This is a great chapter.

I love how this story is unfolding. Everything is going along, and then suddenly wham! you hit us with a surprise that we didn't know about... This time, the stuff about reacting to talking about his family.

It is very well done, very smooth, not jarring at all (as it potentially could be if not done properly). Keeps making me want to read more.

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view keiiii's profile

26th Dec 2015, 7:11 PM

keiiii

I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far! I think I'm doing OK as far as smoothness goes. Some people complained about the mood switches (silly --> serious --> silly --> DEPRESSING --> !?!?) but I think they just might not be the target demographic for this kind of a story.

I'm more concerned about generating the proper levels of excitement/tension, i.e. pacing. Thematic cohesion can also be tricky at times. Hopefully I'll figure out what I'm doing sooner than later! XD

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view Steven-Vincent's profile

26th Dec 2015, 7:15 PM

Steven-Vincent

I think you have done a great job so far on pacing. Characters are interesting and endearing, and make me want to cheer for them. Very important.

As for the mood switches, that is what I meant in my comic. It is hard to pull that off right, but you have done so.

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21st Feb 2016, 8:01 PM

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